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TOEFL学習記録160

MAP Writing

MAP ACTUAL TEST 21

Young people nowadays have no influence on important decisions that determine the future of society.

Some argue that young people today have strong influence on important decisions that determine the future of society. One of their compelling reasons to substantiate their contention is that some young people are very active in volunteer activities and express their opinions on social issues. However, I do not agree with this statement: in my opinion, young people today are not interested in social issues and even if they wish to raise their voices on some social issues, the existing social system tends to neglect their voices. As the result, young people have very little influence on the decision making process.

First of all, young people today are getting less interested in social issues. As the society is getting more complicated, young people in general are getting more individualistic and do not care about some of social issues. There are ample examples to show this trend of young people not paying attention to social issues. The voting rate of young people in any elections at local or national levels is getting lower and lower. My brother, for example, has never participated in any voting; according to his argument, he is not interested in politics because he can live his own life without the support of the government. Unless some issues are directly related with his personal life, he does not care about issues such as abortion, capital punishment, and unemployment.

In addition, even if young people wish to raise their opinions and take actions to resolve some of social issues, older people tend to disregard them because they want to retain the existing systems and do not wish to see any changes in society. Particularly in my country where we have a long lasting tradition of respecting opinions of older people, voices issued by the young generation are simply ignored by senior people. For example, I am one of the youngest members of my company. The other day, in a weekly meeting, I proposed to change the design of one of our traditional products. The rest of participants in the meeting, who are older than me, did not listen to my idea and simply negated by saying I was too young to make such a suggestion. One of the participants even told me that I should wait to make that kind of suggestion till I have worked in the company for at least ten years. This demonstrates that young people’s opinions are treated lightly by older people.

It is true that some young people are very active in participating volunteer activities to resolve some of social issues. However, a majority of young people do not care about social issues especially when these issues do not have significant bearing on their personal lives. In addition, their efforts are not justly appreciated by the society where older people have overwhelming control on the key decision making process. For the above reasons, in my belief, young people today have less influence on important decisions that determine the future of society. (494 words)

構想2分、作文27分、残り1分。チェックの時間が足りない。もっと短くしてチェックの時間を取ること。
本番でこんなことをやったら絶対だめ。
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注意:上記の作文は私の長い勉強過程の一時期に書いたもので、使われているテンプレート、書き方などは現在使っているものと大きく違いますのでご注意ください。 勉強会でご紹介したものが現在のテンプレート、書き方です。

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