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早速、このテンプレートで作文してみました。

Schools should teach students about specific careers and jobs instead of general subjects. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that schools should teach students about general subjects instead of specific careers and jobs. Others think that schools should teach students about specific careers and jobs instead of general subjects. If asked, both groups will provide logical reasons to corroborate their assertions. My contention is that schools should teach students about specific careers and jobs instead of general subjects.

First, students can be motivated to learn subjects about specific careers and jobs. For example, as my father owned a car repair shop, I wanted to work in his garage. I went to a special technical high school where I learned car related subjects. Since I loved cars, I was so motivated and enjoyed every minute of my learning. Had I gone to a general high school, I would not have been highly motivated. As this example demonstrates, students can be motivated to learn subjects about specific careers and jobs.

Secondly, it is a waste of time to study general subjects that have nothing to do with careers and jobs. For instance, my brother, who also wanted to work in my father’s garage, but he went to a general high school, where he had to take many general subjects that have nothing to do with his future career. He complained to me that it was a waste of time studying all those general subjects such as history, geography, and biology that had no bearing on his future career. He hated the school so much that he ended up with quitting the school. Had he gone to a vocational school, he would have enjoyed his school more. As this example illustrates, it is a waste of time to study general subjects that have nothing to do with careers and jobs.

Finally, students will be ready to work in specific careers or jobs. To illustrate, my uncle went to a special school to become an airplane pilot. After three-year program, he was a licensed and certified pilot, and was employed by a local aviation company. After a brief indoctrination and training offered by this company, he started to fly a commercial aircraft. Had he gone to a general school, he would not have been ready for his future career. As this example shows, students will be ready to work in specific careers or jobs

While some people think that schools should teach students about specific careers and jobs instead of general subjects, others think that schools should teach students about general subjects instead of specific careers and jobs. First, students can be motivated to learn subjects about specific careers and jobs. Secondly, it is a waste of time to study general subjects that have nothing to do with careers and jobs. Finally, students will be ready to work in specific careers or jobs. For the above reasons, I am strongly convinced that schools should teach students about specific careers and jobs instead of general subjects.

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文法点を上げるため、仮定法大過去の倒置文を3つ入れました。語彙対策で、big words (corroborate, contention, assertion)を意図的に入れました。485ワードで20分で書きあがりました。魔法のようなテンプレートです。今まで、300ワード稼ぐのに苦労していたのですが、目から鱗です。Cut & Pasteが多すぎる(重複が多すぎる)のが難点かもしれませんが、時間の余裕ができるので、Body123でしっかりとしたロジックを入れることができ、human ratorにも好印象を与えられるのではと期待します。

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注意:上記の作文は私の長い勉強過程の一時期に書いたもので、使われているテンプレート、書き方などは現在使っているものと大きく違いますのでご注意ください。 勉強会でご紹介したものが現在のテンプレート、書き方です。


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